Cheryl Rodewig of The Bayonnet, Fort Benning, Ga., did more than justice to one of the first African-American WACs in her profile, ‘Pioneer’ for women in military shares story.
The piece might have written itself, based on the subject’s life story. But Rodewig used pace and variety to drive the reader from lede to conclusion. She found a quote strong enough to capture the reader’s interest at the top:
FORT BENNING, Ga. — “It was one of the coldest Decembers on record for Cincinnati in 1943. Money was tight, we were at war, and I was needed at home,” said Dorothy Hunter Davis, one of the first African-American women to enlist in the Women’s Army Auxiliary Corps.
She had just finished her freshman year at Wilberforce University when she applied for a position in the secretarial pool at The Kroger Company headquarters.
It’s a story her daughter, Army Community Service marketing manager Carmen Davis, has heard more than once.
Interaction with the daughter is one of the strong points of the piece.
“She took the examination for the secretarial pool, and she got a 100,” Carmen said. “The test giver at the time came out and said, ‘Well, Miss Hunter you did excellent on the test … however, you may want to look for a job elsewhere because you will be the only colored girl here.’ And she was crushed, absolutely devastated.”
Leaving the building to catch a streetcar home, Dorothy passed the window of a local post office, and everything changed for her.
“They had a poster of a woman in a uniform inviting women to join the military service – ‘We need you.’ And my mother said she stopped and dried her eyes, and she walked in,” Carmen said.
Note how each paragraph answers the previous one’s question, then raises an issue for the next graf to answer?
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